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{ "thread_id": "107", "posts": [ { "id": "1016854", "time": "1555978872", "html": "This seems like a good place to post poetry. Any interest in bringing back this thread.?", "user": "stephven" }, { "id": "1016858", "time": "1555984812", "html": "I\u2019ll definitely at least read anything posted here.", "user": "justabitjaded" }, { "id": "1023890", "time": "1561957747", "html": "This is something I wrote a few months ago. I wrote it in a 10 minute sitting, and I've since made some changes, but I was always bad at writing poetry, so please tell me what I can improve on;<br /><br />My body's well worn,<br />Scratched to the bone.<br />Looking, wandering,<br />Yearning for home.<br /><br />My eyes tell my pain,<br />With my lips zipped shut.<br />My thighs tell my tale,<br />But that's just my luck.<br /><br />My body fades slow,<br />My soul is drowning.<br />I can't feel anything,<br />I just want a home.<br /><br />Maybe I'll be whole,<br />One day I can breathe.<br />Right now all that's left,<br />Is for me to flee.<br /><br />I run from my pain,<br />But it will come back.<br />I try to fight it,<br />I'm under attack.<br /><br />I don't think I can.<br />I can't carry on.<br />My faults are too much,<br />I can not break free.<br /><br />Don't cry over me,<br />This is just my fate.<br />I'm bound for heaven,<br />And I won't be late.", "user": "porkiepie3" }, { "id": "1023922", "time": "1561996467", "html": "Dude, I really like that, it's so good", "user": "limescum" }, { "id": "1023996", "time": "1562022327", "html": "Thanks for reading it!", "user": "porkiepie3" }, { "id": "1024054", "time": "1562122460", "html": "Hey, I really liked that too. Especially the vivid, and sometimes blatant, imagery. I really, really liked the last stanza. Especially the last line. It\u2019s so easy to feel that way. It\u2019s something everyone feels. That\u2019s the cool thing about poems like what you wrote there. It\u2019s damn near impossible to not relate to. <br /><br />I just write nebulous and vague nonsense like this: <br /><br />Last night\u2019s cares no longer disturb<br />Nor do its hazes cloud. <br />Last night dreams came abound,<br />And the morning clung to them.<br /><br />No respite from wonderland came<br />Save the bearable lucid dawn.<br />Those lurid streams I wandered,<br />Now hang to me no more. <br /><br />Somedays I\u2019d like to sit<br />And hear the sunbeams dance.<br />Those sparkling rivers call my name<br />As day breaks in advance.<br /><br />No more can I wander the waking dream, <br />For fate dictates me clean,<br />But some days call my name to see<br />The vapors arising green.<br /><br />No more can I wander the silver sliver,<br />Nor rest my headband\u2019s pillow,<br />But truly I wish to stay awhile <br />By that pearly, glistening river.", "user": "antimonypentafluoride" }, { "id": "1024055", "time": "1562124094", "html": "Thanks! <3<br /><br />That's not nonsense, it really makes you think. I've read it life 5 times now and I still don't completely understand it in the best way possible", "user": "porkiepie3" }, { "id": "1024098", "time": "1562177618", "html": "Duuude, I love thatttt aaaaahhhh<br />You guys are so good at poetry, you can just make it whatever and however you want it to be and it's all fuckin good lmao", "user": "limescum" }, { "id": "1024201", "time": "1562199461", "html": "These poems are just sad. It feels like you've given up and lay yourself down, waiting for death like a sick old person in a hospice. <br />We shouldn't be like this. Kick yourself and push on to make a better tomorrow. <br /><a href=\"https://youtu.be/dQw4w9WgXcQ\">Never gonna give up</a>", "user": "mariokirby46" }, { "id": "1024215", "time": "1562210555", "html": "Wow, tooooootally didn't see that one coming ;)<br /><br />But for realsies, I'm fine now, I've worked past it. I was hurt for a long time, but I'm ok now. Pain does make for decent poetry tho....", "user": "porkiepie3" }, { "id": "1024226", "time": "1562214596", "html": "True. It's a drama of how pain sucks. <br />Heck I'm not sure when I'm gonna get hit by great loss. Hope I can pick myself up when it happens", "user": "mariokirby46" }, { "id": "1024227", "time": "1562214680", "html": "And we'll be here for you! <3", "user": "porkiepie3" }, { "id": "1024279", "time": "1562296468", "html": "<div style=\"margin:20px; background-image:url(/images/light.png);\"><div style=\"border:1px solid #888; padding:5px;\"><a href=\"/users/mariokirby46\">mariokirby46</a> said:</div><div style=\"border:1px solid #888; padding:20px;\">These poems are just sad. It feels like you've given up and lay yourself down, waiting for death like a sick old person in a hospice. <br />We shouldn't be like this. Kick yourself and push on to make a better tomorrow. <br /><a href=\"https://youtu.be/dQw4w9WgXcQ\">Never gonna give up</a></div></div>Yeah, I think for a little while I\u2019m gonna start trying to write more happy stuff. Or at least write when I\u2019m not down. Or pissed. Writing when I\u2019m pissed is something I do too much. Trees and rivers. I\u2019m gonna try doing that more.", "user": "antimonypentafluoride" }, { "id": "1024538", "time": "1562550943", "html": "I guess it's normal for people to want to vent their fustrations, and these strong feelings just make good litrature.<br />On the other hand, having a strong emotion of happiness just doesn't happen often if you don't actively look for it", "user": "mariokirby46" }, { "id": "1025694", "time": "1563754937", "html": "<div style=\"margin:20px; background-image:url(/images/light.png);\"><div style=\"border:1px solid #888; padding:5px;\"><a href=\"/users/mariokirby46\">mariokirby46</a> said:</div><div style=\"border:1px solid #888; padding:20px;\">I guess it's normal for people to want to vent their fustrations, and these strong feelings just make good litrature.<br />On the other hand, having a strong emotion of happiness just doesn't happen often if you don't actively look for it</div></div><br /><br />I agree to a certain extent on your last point. I wouldn\u2019t exactly say though that strong emotions make for good writing. Good writing comes from just... writing a lot. Which I don\u2019t do. I\u2019ve noticed something odd though. Even when I am happy or at least not sad or depressed, anything I write still comes out with some sort of sadness. Like that thing I wrote with the \u201cpearly, glistening river\u201d. I was rather okay when I wrote that. I wasn\u2019t sad at all. Writing is just odd in general. There\u2019s bound to be something a bit weird about you if you feel the need to write literature.", "user": "antimonypentafluoride" }, { "id": "1025895", "time": "1563893350", "html": "Alright, I swear I wasn\u2019t sad or depressed or anything when I wrote this one. Someone told me it sounded dark though. God, where\u2019d Antagonist go off to? I could really use their help. Anyone\u2019s helpful though. <br /><br />Here I wrote t three different times. Mostly changing the first part.<br /><br /><a href=\"http://i.imgur.com/JEVqiMZ.jpg\">One version</a><br /><a href=\"http://i.imgur.com/7yWOpd6.jpg\">Another</a><br /><a href=\"http://i.imgur.com/AZBkP6R.jpg\">Yet another</a><br /><br /><br />EDIT: I think I like the third one the best.<br /><br />The second line in the third stanza in the third version should read \u201cwith which\u201d", "user": "antimonypentafluoride" }, { "id": "1032556", "time": "1568222016", "html": "Nights are not for resting;<br />The time when cares should go,<br />Instead they stir up thinking,<br />From which you cannot leave.<br /><br />I\u2019d like to lay and relax,<br />To ease and soothe my head<br />But now I sit in anguish<br />Of thorns my bed is made.", "user": "antimonypentafluoride" }, { "id": "1032658", "time": "1568340150", "html": "<div style=\"margin:20px; background-image:url(/images/light.png);\"><div style=\"border:1px solid #888; padding:5px;\"><a href=\"/users/antimonypentafluoride\">antimony pentafluoride</a> said:</div><div style=\"border:1px solid #888; padding:20px;\">Nights are not for resting;<br />The time when cares should go,<br />Instead they stir up thinking,<br />From which you cannot leave.<br /><br />I\u2019d like to lay and relax,<br />To ease and soothe my head<br />But now I sit in anguish<br />Of thorns my bed is made.</div></div><br /><br />I like it. It sort of picks up intensity as it goes on. Longer lines get me to read it slow and make me think it'll be sort of ruminating, but it ends with an image of sitting in anguish on thorns. It's concise, too. It does all that in 8 lines.<br /><br />Here's a short one of mine from a bar bathroom:<br /><br />The right eye<br />The right eye<br />I just need you for security<br /><br />Look up at me<br />Look up at me<br />I just need your head backwards<br />Keep your eyes open<br />Keep them open<br /><br />I need some water<br />I need some water<br />I need some water<br />I need some water<br /><br />You probably need medical attention<br />To get your eyes taken care of<br />You probably think you don't need it<br />But I'm just saying<br /><br />I got way too drunk<br />Way too fast<br />It wasn't supposed to be like this<br />It wasn't supposed to be like this", "user": "kurmisthefrog" }, { "id": "1039171", "time": "1570417935", "html": "strange places<br /><br /><br />I'm in a strange place<br />Nothing is good<br />And everything is alright<br />Which is all too familiar<br /><br />It's been a while<br />Since I felt something<br />I think I've felt it before<br />But I don't remember when or how<br />Or what it even felt like<br />I'm remembering who I used to be<br />And I'm not quite the same as myself<br /><br />I don't feel like I belong here<br />In a strange place, with strange people<br />But there's nowhere else I've been<br />Where I've ever truly belonged", "user": "justabitjaded" }, { "id": "1039174", "time": "1570419680", "html": "Okay I might just be delirious at this point but this is what I just wrote now:<br /><br />my bed<br /><br /><br />this bed is my bed<br />i belong in my bed<br />this bed is here<br />but i don't belong here<br /><br />my bed is at home<br />i'm at home in this bed<br />this bed is here<br />but here is not home<br /><br />at home i go to sleep<br />i sleep in my bed<br />this bed is here<br />and here i go to sleep", "user": "justabitjaded" }, { "id": "1039780", "time": "1570765677", "html": "Guess what, it's me again.<br /><br />Dreamer<br /><br /><br />Why am I so angry?<br />It's all right there outside my window.<br />The light from the city becomes a star-spangled skyline,<br />Promising me anything that I want.<br /><br />I go to bed hopeful - Tomorrow is a new day!<br />But I wake up and the stars have faded,<br />And the sky is clouded over,<br />And it is just the dreamer that remains.<br /><br />I dream of the stars, a new dream every night.<br />But I see now that the sky is black;<br />I can only see the city,<br />I am forced to see the light.<br /><br />The stars, the real stars, have remained faded,<br />Hidden and out of sight.<br />The dreams, the real dreams, have remained, faded.<br />But still I remain, and I dream every night.", "user": "justabitjaded" }, { "id": "1040464", "time": "1571118004", "html": "I really enjoyed reading your stuff jaded!<br /><br />So, I have a thing I wrote just now, but it's not finished. The thing is, I don't think I can finish it. It's got a pretty simplistic scheme, and I want you guys to add on wherever and whatever you want \ud83d\ude42<br /><br />I miss outside,<br />The wind whipping around my face.<br />I miss the grass,<br />My toes wriggling in without a trace.<br /><br />I miss the cold,<br />The snow melting on my breathless skin.<br />I miss my friends,<br />Their familiarity leaves an unfamiliar ache within.<br /><br />I miss my house,<br />The life that grew inside.<br />I miss my home,<br />My shelter and my guide.", "user": "porkiepie3" }, { "id": "1049896", "time": "1573903998", "html": "Ain\u2019t a poem. Started out as one. Turned into whatever this is. <br /><br /><br />He cries. He claps his hands and sighs. <br />Chasing away the mosquito ringing his ears who flies about incessantly and sickens her food with inflammation yet comes back again three fold, chasing away her hunger \u2018round the addled boy\u2019s small bed who sniffles through clouds and dreams to see fields for only trees encircle him. <br /><br />The wretch approaches his face and lands on his cheek while he lays frozen, wondering if he should stop it or slap his face while the pissant flies away just to see him again in his sedated sleep. No sleep came, only a lull, while he lays and rocks his bed with an anger that no one can quell; his face to the ceiling; his arms to the bed frame; his mind to his family whom he may see no more. The child seethes and cries as a figure across the way has tears in his eyes dreaming to see the boy again; whispering, shouting, begging God for forgiveness, begging to hear the voice that speaks in the music that is joy, that is peace. Yearning again and again to feel the laughter that only a child may bring.", "user": "antimonypentafluoride" }, { "id": "1063971", "time": "1581328085", "html": "Love by William Shakespeare<br /><br />TELL me where is Fancy bred,<br />Or in the heart or in the head?<br />How begot, how nourished?<br /> Reply, reply.<br />It is engender'd in the eyes,<br />With gazing fed; and Fancy dies<br />In the cradle where it lies.<br /> Let us all ring Fancy's knell:<br /> I'll begin it,--Ding, dong, bell.<br />All. Ding, dong, bell.", "user": "carlalopez3620" }, { "id": "1066341", "time": "1582779030", "html": "Sky.<br /><br />Night falls over the barren landscape<br />The comfort of home, far behind<br />Crickets chirp. I listen to my own breath.<br />Loneliness creeps in.<br /><br />I chose this<br />Leaving was the only option<br />Staying behind would mean emptiness<br />Whenever I looked at the sky, I always saw infinity<br />The possibilities, what could have been<br />The great unknown.<br /><br />Now I see beauty. <br />Stars rise overhead, as the oppressive sun diffuses behind me<br />I\u2019m not running away, I am running towards<br />I am running towards the night, the unknown<br />New Beginnings<br /><br />Sky.<br /><br />Miles of road lay before me<br />East, I find myself thinking<br />I know not the destination, only the direction<br />I don\u2019t know where my journey will take me<br /><br />The desert grows larger, <br />I see mountains in the distance<br />The sky is bigger<br />Wherever I go, it is here for me<br />I look up, I am enveloped.<br /><br />Sky.<br /><br />I remember what I left.<br />A chance to change the world.<br />A life, people who cared.<br />No regrets, I am running towards<br /><br />Sky.<br /><br />I walk.<br />Hours pass.<br />The desert is empty<br />I\u2019m not empty.<br /><br />Sky.<br /><br />Soon I will only be Sky.", "user": "totallynotjaxon" } ], "users": { "stephven": { "name": "Stephven", "key": "stephven", "url": "/users/stephven", "avatar": "/uploads/drawn/12235.png", "rankClass": "civilian", "rankText": "", "posts": "2021" }, "justabitjaded": { "name": "justabitjaded", "key": "justabitjaded", "url": "/users/justabitjaded", "avatar": "/uploads/drawn/20021.png", "rankClass": "civilian", "rankText": "", "posts": "3478" }, "porkiepie3": { "name": "PorkiePie3", "key": "porkiepie3", "url": "/users/porkiepie3", "avatar": "/uploads/drawn/13272.png", "rankClass": "civilian", "rankText": "", "posts": "2889" }, "limescum": { "name": "limescum", "key": "limescum", "url": "/users/limescum", "avatar": "/uploads/drawn/20714.png", "rankClass": "civilian", "rankText": "", "posts": "913" }, "antimonypentafluoride": { "name": "antimony pentafluoride", "key": "antimonypentafluoride", "url": "/users/antimonypentafluoride", "avatar": "/uploads/drawn/4436.png", "rankClass": "civilian", "rankText": "", "posts": "2977" }, "mariokirby46": { "name": "mariokirby46", "key": "mariokirby46", "url": "/users/mariokirby46", "avatar": "/uploads/drawn/11048.png", "rankClass": "civilian", "rankText": "", "posts": "297" }, "kurmisthefrog": { "name": "KurmisTheFrog", "key": "kurmisthefrog", "url": "/users/kurmisthefrog", "avatar": "/uploads/drawn/19802.png", "rankClass": "civilian", "rankText": "", "posts": "648" }, "carlalopez3620": { "name": "carlalopez3620", "key": "carlalopez3620", "url": "/users/carlalopez3620", "avatar": "/images/white.png", "rankClass": "civilian", "rankText": "", "posts": "9" }, "totallynotjaxon": { "name": "TotallyNotJaxon", "key": "totallynotjaxon", "url": "/users/totallynotjaxon", "avatar": "/uploads/drawn/16746.png", "rankClass": "civilian", "rankText": "", "posts": "1875" } }, "page_num": 42, "locked": 0, "total_pages": 43 }

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