Two Cans & String

{ "thread_id": "107", "posts": [ { "id": "1066342", "time": "1582779437", "html": "<h2 class=\"heading\">Title : Deep and Meaningful</h2><br />A begger sits on the street<br />How different can he be from us<br />He breathes<br />He eats<br />He dreams<br />He lives<br />He is a diamond in the rough<br />He is an unpolished penny<br />He is a -<br /><br />I\u2019m sorry.<br />I can\u2019t do this anymore<br />I can pretend to be deep and meaningful<br />Pretend my poetry has a purpose<br />Pretend like my usage of metaphor<br />Says something deep about my soul<br />When all I\u2019m really doing is going down a list<br />From seventh grade<br />Listing all the things I can do in poetry<br />Titled:<br />\u201cLiterary Devices<br />It\u2019s like food<br />With spices\u201d<br /><br />I don\u2019t want to feel smug<br />When people look at me<br />And say<br />\u201cThat\u2019s deep\u201d<br />And pretend like I\u2019m some sort of visionary.<br />I could write a poem called<br />\u201cRavens in a Coal Mine at Midnight\u201d<br />And describe <br />My quote-unquote soul and emotions<br />And act deep and profound<br />When describing my inner thoughts<br />In prose that sounds like I just<br />Followed the three-step poetry plan<br /><br />Step One:<br />Talk about what you\u2019re feeling<br /> or thinking about.<br />It could be about School<br />It could be about your feelings<br />Extra points from teacher<br />If you talk about a social justice topic<br />Like \u201cAutism\u201d<br />Or \u201cDepression\u201d<br />A-plus if you talk about<br />something meaningless<br />Like a random encounter at night<br />Or a chair you bought from Ikea<br /><br />Step \u2018Twah<br />Find some words in your poem<br />Like \u201cthe car\u201d or<br />\u201cMy feelings\u201d<br />And replace them with words<br />That basically describe it<br />How a liberal arts major would<br />Replace \u201ccar\u201d<br />With \u201cGrowling metal steed\u201d<br />And \u201cmy feelings\u201d<br />With \u201cten pound weights around my soul\u201d<br />You get bonus points<br />If you use 10 lines<br />To describe something<br />You could say in 2 words<br /><br />Step 3:<br />Profit<br /><br />You could call this a roast<br />Of all you people who are better at poetry than me<br />You could say I\u2019m jealous<br /><br />I\u2019m not<br /><br />You could psycho-analyze me<br />Say it\u2019s some repressed feelings<br /><br />They\u2019re not.<br /><br />You could simply say I\u2019m being rude<br />And you know what?<br /><br />I am.<br /><br />Because poetry is just like painting<br />You could throw hours of work<br />Carefully composing the colors<br />The lines and the feelings<br />The flow of the brush.<br />Or you could take a spoon<br />Fill it with paint and throw it at the canvas<br />You can\u2019t tell the garbage from the art.<br />What took time<br />What took blood<br />What took sweat<br />What took tears<br />What took a lifetime of cooking in a pot<br />What took hours of simmering in quiet contemplation<br />What took an actual artist actual thought and actually expression<br />Is indistinguishable<br />From what took an asshat like me<br />Twenty minutes on Google docs<br />Ten of which were used to choose a font<br />Thinking about how to break up lines<br />Of what essentially is a paragraph<br />To make it sound \u201cpoemish\u201d<br />The garbage looks just like the \u201cart\u201d<br />Just like Jackson Pollock.<br />I guess what I\u2019m trying to say<br />Is<br />F*ck AP Art History.<br /><br /><br />(Sorry if that comes off as assholish. I wrote this a while ago and I was reminded about it when this thread popped up again)", "user": "kylljoy" }, { "id": "1071409", "time": "1584587157", "html": "<span style=\"font-weight:bold;\">It could've been</span><br /><br />I took mushrooms again<br />To find myself<br />Or maybe just as another escape<br />Escape I did<br />It wasn't pleasant<br />It didn't give me much<br />A bunch of thoughts that don't make sense<br />Another dream I've yet to wake up from<br />Another reason for those in my support system<br />To get concerned<br />For my well being<br /><br />Well, being that I'm pretty sure I'm alive<br />I think it's going alright<br /><br />How it went?<br />Oh, it was something like scary, and sad, and strange, and pleasant<br />A bunch of nonsense again, I guess<br />I try to interpret it<br />Dogshit<br />With bits of information<br />I can process<br /><br />At times it felt like that hallway in PT<br />Or groundhogs day<br />My life and how it is<br />Again<br />And again<br />And again<br />And again<br /><br />Addition<br />Subtraction<br />Multiplication<br />Division<br />Exponents<br />Logrithms<br />Base 10<br />And back again<br /><br />A dot<br />A line<br />Concentric circles<br />Rings<br />Spheres<br />Hyper shapes<br />And somehow back to where we started<br />Again<br /><br />Back to the game<br />Back to my awkward thoughts<br />Back to my awkward tics<br />And the wrong things become everything<br />Again<br /><br />Back to the door<br />Back to another cigarette<br />Back to bed<br />Back to check my phone<br />Back to struggle with a simple task for much too long<br />Back to negative thoughts of other people<br />Of my friends<br />Of myself<br />Again<br /><br />Back to my own head<br />Thoughts that make<br />Less<br />And less<br />And less<br />And less<br />Sense<br />Again<br /><br />Back to that red eye<br />Back to it's just a little one<br />Back to thought loops<br />Back to that's amazing<br />Back to that's stupid<br />Back to the end<br />Back to this is the end<br />Back to this is everything<br />Back to you are no one<br />Back to hyperautoastropseudopsychoanalyzation<br />Back to everything<br />Back to nothing<br />Back to thought loops, thought loops, thought loops<br />Back to this happens all the time<br />Back to my mind<br />Back to this is just a little one<br />Again<br />And again<br />And again<br />And again<br /><br />It felt like days<br />It felt like weeks<br />It felt immeasurable<br />It didn't feel like me<br /><br />I got out at some point<br />I can't tell you what I did<br />Or what I learned from it<br />This time<br /><br />I think I fell asleep<br />But I don't remember my dream<br />I just remember getting up at some point<br />To some chill guitar in the other room<br />To my friend<br />Yes my friend<br />Saying that they were glad I was back<br />And I don't know how I felt about it<br />Or anything<br /><br />A bunch of thoughts that don't make sense<br />Another dream I've yet to wake up from<br />Another reason for those in my support system<br />To get concerned<br />For my well being<br />Again<br />And again<br />And again<br />And again<br />And then it ends", "user": "kurmisthefrog" }, { "id": "1090521", "time": "1604284835", "html": "In the water;<br />Hoisting<br />My body by my arms <br />From one rock to another. <br />What started out so innocent,<br />Jumping from rock to rock and <br />Playing in the water<br />That now became a river <br />In which I nearly fell<br />In which I nearly drowned.", "user": "antimonypentafluoride" }, { "id": "1090558", "time": "1604343833", "html": "Bedsheets engulf from foot to head while <br />Hands reach frantically about the cotton cave<br />Grasping for the warmth of one who is absent,<br />Smelling the breath of comfort on the chest, <br />Knowing closed-eye blackness awaits after<br />The panting end.", "user": "antimonypentafluoride" }, { "id": "1090603", "time": "1604415486", "html": "This is a haiku <br />I'm not good at poetry<br />Please do not judge me", "user": "dementedkermit" }, { "id": "1091337", "time": "1604872564", "html": "Air tearing at lungs<br />Sunlight burning the retina<br />The bed with just yourself taunts and calls<br />Back to sleep while brine inflames the eyelids and cheeks <br />Only stifled by yawns and distaste for the day<br />Greeting all with murmurs that poorly hide your anguish.", "user": "antimonypentafluoride" }, { "id": "1099317", "time": "1608321112", "html": "<div style=\"margin:20px; background-image:url(/images/light.png);\"><div style=\"border:1px solid #888; padding:5px;\"><a href=\"/users/antimonypentafluoride\">antimony pentafluoride</a> said:</div><div style=\"border:1px solid #888; padding:20px;\">Air tearing at lungs<br />Sunlight burning the retina<br />The bed with just yourself taunts and calls<br />Back to sleep while brine inflames the eyelids and cheeks <br />Only stifled by yawns and distaste for the day<br />Greeting all with murmurs that poorly hide your anguish.</div></div><br /><br />tbh idk what the internet etiquette for replying to forum posts is but just wanted to say that is a really powerful opening line, I love it. Air tearing at lungs, that is very good nice job", "user": "heartachetosing" }, { "id": "1099913", "time": "1609178854", "html": "Woah thanks dude", "user": "antimonypentafluoride" }, { "id": "1101337", "time": "1610440966", "html": "feeling fleeting feelings<br />that flutter in the snow<br />flakes fly all around us<br />a flurry to behold<br /><br />we were falling freely<br />when warmth embraced by cold<br />wandered, wavered, whimpered,<br />did melt and then no more", "user": "justabitjaded" }, { "id": "1102401", "time": "1611247550", "html": "I'm Sorry I'm twisted,<br />I'm sorry I'm broken,<br />I'm sorry I'm tested.<br />I'm alone desiring remission.<br /><br />I know kids who cut their skin<br />Thinking their life has no clarity,<br />While people get under their skin,<br />Is it what they are meant to be?<br /><br />I was once like them you know,<br />I thought what they did in their heart,<br />But as I got older my pain began to grow.<br />Youth was only the start.<br /><br />Some how I am still alive,<br />I've lived past my expectation.<br />Everyone around me starts to thrive,<br />How will I reach their expectation?<br /><br />Maybe I make no sense and sound irrational,<br />But for once I hope you understand,<br />But depression is international,<br />And I've lived years longer than I planned.<br /><br />I thought that I'd already be long gone!<br />I hate myself and wish I were dead!<br />Nobody sees I stand alone!<br />You don't know what goes on in my head!", "user": "aspen" }, { "id": "1105271", "time": "1613013605", "html": "IDK if this is a poem but... whatever!<br /><br /><span style=\"text-decoration:underline;\">Future Plans</span><br />I'd like to live in a small, pleasant, midwestern <span style=\"font-style:italic;\">metropolitan area.</span> I'll make lifelong friends together and our kids will play together. I'll stay in that same town for the rest of my life and <span style=\"font-style:italic;\">move to another country.</span><br />My career will be accounting and I'll head into it straight after college but I'll have been a <span style=\"font-style:italic;\">cross-county truck driver. </span>As a stable, loyal, and committed worker I'll move up in my career and also have been a piolet and flight attendant .<br />I'll come out to my parents about my religion and become a nun to hide my identity from my parents. I'll send my parents the essay I wrote Junior year and maintain a healthy and strong relationship with them for the rest of their lives.<br />I will NEVER have kids, but I'll adopt and my best friend's families will go on vacation with my family.<br /><br />I'll hold on to who I am now, but I'll grow, change, evolve to become a better me.<br /><br />I'll come to terms with reality but still believe in silly things,<br /><br />And have the perfect life without ever expecting myself to be perfect.<br />I'll wake up earlier and get to sleep in.<br /><br />They wouldn't want it any other way because they never wanted it a way in the first place.", "user": "purplelover" }, { "id": "1105274", "time": "1613013913", "html": "Idk if I'm supposed to give feedback but I hope that you wrote that like that purposefully. In case you didn't, I wont elaborate. I'm very sorry have a nice day.", "user": "garfieldmeitsgarfield" }, { "id": "1108576", "time": "1614052743", "html": "Daybreak-<br />Pained eyes gaze upon<br />An illuminated popcorn ceiling<br />Revealing the mess on the abdomen <br />Produced in the just experienced darkness,<br />Uncovering realities missed<br />In the witching hour\u2019s waking dreams,<br />Reminding over and over <br />Of the futility in searching<br />For comfort in sweaty faces <br />Behind a glowing screen. <br /><br />Yes I am gross.", "user": "antimonypentafluoride" } ], "users": { "kylljoy": { "name": "Kylljoy", "key": "kylljoy", "url": "/users/kylljoy", "avatar": "/uploads/drawn/22660.png", "rankClass": "civilian", "rankText": "", "posts": "3085" }, "kurmisthefrog": { "name": "KurmisTheFrog", "key": "kurmisthefrog", "url": "/users/kurmisthefrog", "avatar": "/uploads/drawn/19802.png", "rankClass": "civilian", "rankText": "", "posts": "650" }, "antimonypentafluoride": { "name": "antimony pentafluoride", "key": "antimonypentafluoride", "url": "/users/antimonypentafluoride", "avatar": "/uploads/drawn/22620.png", "rankClass": "civilian", "rankText": "", "posts": "3054" }, "dementedkermit": { "name": "dementedkermit", "key": "dementedkermit", "url": "/users/dementedkermit", "avatar": "/uploads/drawn/21770.png", "rankClass": "civilian", "rankText": "", "posts": "4497" }, "heartachetosing": { "name": "heartachetosing", "key": "heartachetosing", "url": "/users/heartachetosing", "avatar": "/uploads/drawn/17122.png", "rankClass": "civilian", "rankText": "", "posts": "10" }, "justabitjaded": { "name": "justabitjaded", "key": "justabitjaded", "url": "/users/justabitjaded", "avatar": "/uploads/drawn/20021.png", "rankClass": "civilian", "rankText": "", "posts": "3495" }, "aspen": { "name": "Aspen", "key": "aspen", "url": "/users/aspen", "avatar": "/uploads/drawn/18823.png", "rankClass": "civilian", "rankText": "", "posts": "48" }, "purplelover": { "name": "Purplelover", "key": "purplelover", "url": "/users/purplelover", "avatar": "/uploads/drawn/21319.png", "rankClass": "civilian", "rankText": "", "posts": "628" }, "garfieldmeitsgarfield": { "name": "Garfield.Me.It'sGarfield", "key": "garfieldmeitsgarfield", "url": "/users/garfieldmeitsgarfield", "avatar": "/uploads/drawn/12663.png", "rankClass": "civilian", "rankText": "", "posts": "936" } }, "page_num": 43, "locked": 0, "total_pages": 43 }

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